21银蚂蚁 发表于 2009-6-26 11:02

滁州西涧

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<p align="center"><font style="FONT-SIZE: 16px">唐&nbsp;<wbr> .韦应物</font>
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<p align="center"><font style="FONT-SIZE: 16px">独怜幽草涧边生,</font>
<p align="center"><font style="FONT-SIZE: 16px">上有黄鹂深树鸣。</font>
<p align="center"><font style="FONT-SIZE: 16px">春潮带雨晚来急,</font>
<p align="center"><font style="FONT-SIZE: 16px">野渡无人舟自横。</font>
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<br><wbr>&nbsp;夕阳的余辉已经黯淡,萤火虫引燃了星光,一盏接着一盏。通向渡口的小路两旁,除了在深草间隐藏的虫鸣之外,也只有远处密林间黄鹂的夜唱,才能引起老渡工遥远的回忆以及他小孙子好奇的遥望。
<br>&nbsp;<wbr>&nbsp;<wbr>&nbsp;<wbr>&nbsp;<wbr>&nbsp;<wbr> 夜风来了,老渡工唤回在岸边玩耍的小孙子,用船上蓬的竹帘把随风而至的细雨挡在了外面。他拨亮了油灯,让透着油气的灯光照亮了船篷里的每一个角落:照亮了小孙子可爱的红肚兜兜,也照亮了自己被摆渡的岁月刻下了深深皱纹的脸。
<br>&nbsp;<wbr>&nbsp;<wbr>&nbsp;<wbr>&nbsp;<wbr>&nbsp;<wbr> 老渡工把小孙子搂在怀里,任他随意摆弄着自己细长而浓密的山羊胡子,随后又在油灯上引燃了填得满满的烟叶,深深吸上一口,吐出一片迷烟,小孙子便迷倒在他悠长的故事里……

21银蚂蚁 发表于 2009-6-26 11:04

这是一篇课堂小作文,当时被张老师批得 很惨很惨很惨很惨很惨很惨很惨很惨很惨

仙剑奇侠传 发表于 2009-6-26 11:13

我觉得还不错了啊&nbsp; 为什么老师会不喜欢呢?

玛莉莎 发表于 2009-6-26 11:15

<br>哈哈 小孙子闻二手烟了&nbsp; 不挨批才怪

e 发表于 2009-6-26 11:23

<br>吐出一片迷烟,小孙子便迷倒在他悠长的故事里
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<br>我怎么想起杰克逊了 不过杰克逊是用酒.让小孩子倒在他怀里。
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<br>楼主是在隐喻吗?
[此贴子已经被作者于2009-6-26 12:26:38编辑过]

xgdy 发表于 2009-6-26 11:29

<div class="quote"><b>以下是引用<i>e</i>在2009-6-26 11:23:00的发言:</b><br/>
<br>吐出一片迷烟,小孙子便迷倒在他悠长的故事里
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<br>我怎么想起杰克逊了 不过杰克逊是用酒</div>
<br>刚晓得他挂了~~~~~看来漂白皮肤还是不好

awaylam 发表于 2009-6-26 11:46

唯硬物的这首诗,倒是很有YY的空间啊

小山猫 发表于 2009-6-26 11:57

<br>奖励各位的时候很妒忌你们啊!
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喵喵 发表于 2009-6-26 12:14

<div class="quote"><b>以下是引用<i>21银蚂蚁</i>在2009-6-26 11:04:00的发言:</b><br/>这是一篇课堂小作文,当时被张老师批得 很惨很惨很惨很惨很惨很惨很惨很惨很惨 </div>
<br>因为老师想教育,吸烟有害健康!
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吴某人 发表于 2009-6-26 12:20

<div class="quote"><b>以下是引用<i>awaylam</i>在2009-6-26 11:46:00的发言:</b><br/>唯硬物的这首诗,倒是很有YY的空间啊 </div>
<br>好好的名字,让你一说,就很YD了

e 发表于 2009-6-26 12:28

这本来就被人YY 成了淫诗

e 发表于 2009-6-26 12:29

韦应物(为硬物)!此乃世间男人之向往,名字最重要,而淫才也不得不服,第一句用诗来形容女人:“独怜幽草涧边生”。此草非彼草,此涧非彼涧啊!第二句:上有黄鹂深树鸣,此乃本诗的一大败笔,本人认为改为“上有白鸽深树鸣”比较贴切。第三句:“春潮带雨晚来急”。潮与急,突出表现了做某些事情的主要原因与经过。最后一句,野渡无人舟自横。事完了,人走了,船也就自由了。该办的都办了,该做的都做了,一走了之,这过程到现在的社会还能用而且越来越多。不拖泥带水,干净利落的完事走人。潇洒!此人入选第八无庸置疑。

诗酒 发表于 2009-6-26 12:38

<br>我家离西涧不远。可惜啊,现在西涧是个水库。一点都不好玩了。
<br>哪位兄弟想来滁玩,跟我说一声。

awaylam 发表于 2009-6-26 12:50

<div class="quote"><b>以下是引用<i>e</i>在2009-6-26 12:29:00的发言:</b><br/>韦应物(为硬物)!此乃世间男人之向往,名字最重要,而淫才也不得不服,第一句用诗来形容女人:“独怜幽草涧边生”。此草非彼草,此涧非彼涧啊!第二句:上有黄鹂深树鸣,此乃本诗的一大败笔,本人认为改为“上有白鸽深树鸣”比较贴切。第三句:“春潮带雨晚来急”。潮与急,突出表现了做某些事情的主要原因与经过。最后一句,野渡无人舟自横。事完了,人走了,船也就自由了。该办的都办了,该做的都做了,一走了之,这过程到现在的社会还能用而且越来越多。不拖泥带水,干净利落的完事走人。潇洒!此人入选第八无庸置疑。 </div>
<br>对于野渡无人舟自横这句,A某有不同解,A解为,看似无人实有人,岸上无人舟有人,舟中有人看不见,这句乃是精品,留下无限空间,让人猜测舟中人的情况。将舟横于水中央,不受外界影响,此中境界与温情,确实少有

TXB 发表于 2009-6-26 12:58

LZ这么好的文笔当个版主吧 和山猫一起
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